Tuesday, July 22, 2008

The Greatest Man of All

My father is the greatest man I ever met. He has all the traits I want a man to have. He is very friendly. Almost all our neighbors are friends of him. He easily have friends. And it's because of his behavior in cooking. He is always cooking for them. He enjoyed cooking. And he cooked very well. He liked to do girl's work rather than doing man's work. That's why I like my father more to be the house husband rather than my mother. He is also silent. That's why I'm wondering to whom did I get my noisiness. That's my father, silent but deadly.

1 comment:

mafi said...

Your compostion is nice and it is interesting but I noticed some mistakes in the sentence.

"He enjoyed cooking. And he cooked very well." It can be one sentence only and I believe that it is not okay to start the sentence with the word and...

that's all! n_~